Turtle Tail, I know you'll always be with me," he called. "You waited a long time for our love to grow and it won't die now. I'll fight for you, Turtle Tail, and I'll make sure that your kits have a future on the moor, safe among friends." The clouds touched, becoming one. "I will not fail you.
At the end, you need a quotation. I won't point out anything that I think is a mistake because I don't know what moor or kits are unless you're referring to kittens. Just some feedback!